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the government should lower the bughet on the arts in order to allocate more money to education. To extend do you agree?

#government #bughet #arts #money #education
There is no doubt that these days,
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 several artists make high
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 for one painting they gain as much as they can,
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,
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communities
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 200$ and the painting is not the
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. The question is, the government must less the
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budget
 on the arts in a request to allocate extra money to education. In
this
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 I am going to discuss my opinion. In terms of the problems, several of the artists did not expect the
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 for each painting is more costly they put some
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 it should be the
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 of these
paintings
 100$
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 rate makes societies to purchase these
paintings
. The main reason given to support
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people on social media
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put high
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 for the
communities
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paintings
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 they put 1000$ for each
paintings
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 the
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government
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 to
this
 matter,
however
, the government did
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to
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those society
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In other words
, as I know the government should
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penalise
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 these people forever.
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, it
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 to make
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punishment
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 did
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 know the account so it should
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careful
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careful
 about
this
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this
 situation as I know
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 issue did not have any advantages at all,
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, it makes the
communities
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, I believe that without cheating into people makes societies trust you and makes life
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easier
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 one trust you.
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