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. Today more countries import food from different parts of the world. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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. Today more
countries
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 import
food
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 from different
parts
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 of the world. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of
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 trend. There is no iota of doubt that nowadays more firms purchase eatable things from different
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 of the globe. It has made people’s lives a bed of roses,
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however
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 sometimes it opens a pandora’s
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. The following paragraphs would highlight the merits and demerits of the same. There are umpteen benefits which people enjoy with
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 concept.
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, by importing meals from different
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 of the world,
countries
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 provide a wider range of
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 to their society.
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, people can buy numerous varieties of
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 from supermarkets and groceries at a cheap price.
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, it helps to offer more job opportunities to the nation. Adding
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 a couple of more thing some
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 cannot produce some sorts of
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 and fruit in their nation due to weather condition,
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 it is adiful for them since they do not have
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 shortage by it and human beings can enjoy all kinds of foodstuff without any worry in other
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 of the world. To exemplify it, there is a paradigm of India getting kiwi fruit from News Zealand through importing as it is not produced in India due to harsh weather.
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, many industries purchase
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 in bulk at a reasonable price and after importing they sell it to consumers at higher prices. Which helps to boost profits of the business. On the flip side of the coin, there are some inevitable drawbacks associated. Pollution is increased by importing
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 from other nations since the
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 use many transportations for it
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 as trucks and planes. Which is harmful to our environment.
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, it is not a healthy
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 for the community as while importing from other
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, used harmful chemicals for it, since these chemicals help to increase the shelf life of
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.
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, importing vegetables and fruits from other
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 consumes more time and money. So, the economy of poor
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 can weaken by it. To recapitulate it, I personally feel that those pros outweigh the cons, so
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 trend should be promoted for the betterment of humanity.
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