Some people think that the (government should provide (assistance) to (all kinds of artists) including painters, musicians, and poets. However, other people think that (this is a waste of money). Discuss both views and give your opinion.

While
some consider that the authorities should contribute financially to all individuals working in the
art
field, others are of the opinion that
such
initiatives are a waste of property.In my opinion,
while
funding for run-of-the-mill
artists
might be unsatisfying, a degree of funding is required for some of the talented. On the one hand, since the financial offer for
artists
has been made by the authorities , the probability of plenty of amateurs labelling themselves as professionals and seeking monetary aid would increase.Even at present, several unskilled
art
practitioners are taking shortcuts to receive
money
effortlessly.
For instance
, there is an increasing number of people who sell NFTs,which are minute digital
art
pieces eligible solely on the
internet
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.The quality of some of the so-called NFT
art
pieces is quite low-brow,straightforward and primitive,yet these producer
artists
gain enormous amounts from the buyers.
This
indicates that there are opportunistic amateurs out there wishing for easy
money
.
On the other hand
,several outstanding
artists
have been left unnoticed and unappreciated,leading to the situation where they have to feed from hand to mouth.The
art
field has always been considered
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prestigious, and even if some
artists
produce masterpieces,they can receive less attention and
be
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not as famous
that of
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amateurs.
For example
,the author of the 'Don Quixote', the legendary novel ,
who
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had to live as a disabled person his whole life without receiving much capital and attention until he died in his humble home.
Hence
, to reward those who
are deserved
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while
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their lives are still intact, governments should seek and provide funding. In conclusion, despite providing
money
for
artists
can
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be deemed as wasting
money
if it is perceived from some aspects, there are still excellent
artists
out there being unappreciated,so in my opinion, people should cut off superficialities and support the ones who deserve the applause.
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