ln the last century when a human astronaout first arrived on the Moon he said: "lt is a big step for mankind". But some people think it makes liltle difference to our daily life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
In a hinds
sight
big discoveries in major fields of sciences not only advance that particular field but in time influence our daily Add a comma
,sight
lives
. The first
astronaout
who arrived on the Moon indeed make a huge leap for mankind. Correct your spelling
astronaut
astronauts
Benefits
of Correct article usage
The benefits
such
development might be seen as insignificant by some people because it brings no tangible difference in their immediate daily lives
. While I see why some people might hold such
a view, I strongly believe that in order for human society to keep evolving and advancing, it is important to keep making these big steps which in time will be evident in our day to day
Add a hyphen
day-to-day
lives
.
To take arriving on the Moon for the first
time as an example, it expands our idea to
the possibility of life on other planets. Now decades later, it avails the real possibility to even travel to places Change preposition
of
such
as Mars as a tourist. Correct your spelling
Moreover
Morever
, thanks to the improvements in satellite technology we have much better internet. What could not bring quick Correct your spelling
Moreover
result
in our daily Fix the agreement mistake
results
lives
might bring the change we need tomorrow.
In conclusion, advancement
in technology and science might not always bring the desired immediate result in our daily Fix the agreement mistake
advancements
lives
. However
, the process of progress and development do
in fact bring the result in our daily Change the verb form
does
lives
. I disagree with the notion that scientific advancement is insignificant due to its inability to impact our daily lives
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite