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A"cashless society" is one where people use Debit/Credit cards and other forms of payment instead of cash. Do the advantages of a cashless society outweigh the disadvantages.

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In
this
 contemporary time, with the use of newly innovated
technology
people
 can do any
payment
 transaction online.
This
 is the reason why it is trending nowadays a cashless society in which every individual can pay by Debit/Credit cards
instead
 of cash. I strongly believe that
payment
 thru the use of cards has more merits than drawbacks. To commence with, these days,
people
 are more convenient to use online
payment
 due to the fact that the
internet
 is accessible anywhere in the world. The moneyless financial transaction is popular today most especially during
this
 time of coronavirus.
Furthermore
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 populace
are
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 terrified of going outside because they can get the virus.
Thus
 they just do errands by browsing the
internet
 just like buying groceries and paying bills which they can easily pay by using Debit/Credit cards.
Additionally
, there are instances in life that a person can forget their wallets but they can still do payments because
gadget
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 like
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smartphones
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smart phones
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smartphones
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have
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 an Apple and Samsung pay.
Consequently
, the
internet
 can access by professional hackers who can do
scam
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to
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random
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a random
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person
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people
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 who
are
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is
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 mostly not knowledgeable about new
technology
. When they access the one-time password, they can easily get the money from others. In my conclusion, innovation of
technology
 is beneficial to
majority
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the majority
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 of
population
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the population
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 because
payment
 online is more convenient rather than using cash.
However
, the
internet
 can be accessible to professional hackers that can do theft
to
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other innocent
people
 just by using the
internet
.
Therefore
,
people
 should be
knowledge
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in
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about
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technology
 to keep their money safe.
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