A"cashless society" is one where people use Debit/Credit cards and other forms of payment instead of cash. Do the advantages of a cashless society outweigh the disadvantages.

In
this
contemporary time, with the use of newly innovated
technology
people
can do any
payment
transaction online.
This
is the reason why it is trending nowadays a cashless society in which every individual can pay by Debit/Credit cards
instead
of cash. I strongly believe that
payment
thru the use of cards has more merits than drawbacks. To commence with, these days,
people
are more convenient to use online
payment
due to the fact that the
internet
is accessible anywhere in the world. The moneyless financial transaction is popular today most especially during
this
time of coronavirus.
Furthermore
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populace
are
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terrified of going outside because they can get the virus.
Thus
they just do errands by browsing the
internet
just like buying groceries and paying bills which they can easily pay by using Debit/Credit cards.
Additionally
, there are instances in life that a person can forget their wallets but they can still do payments because
gadget
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like
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smartphones
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smart phones
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have
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an Apple and Samsung pay.
Consequently
, the
internet
can access by professional hackers who can do
scam
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to
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random
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a random
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person
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people
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who
are
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mostly not knowledgeable about new
technology
. When they access the one-time password, they can easily get the money from others. In my conclusion, innovation of
technology
is beneficial to
majority
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the majority
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of
population
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the population
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because
payment
online is more convenient rather than using cash.
However
, the
internet
can be accessible to professional hackers that can do theft
to
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other innocent
people
just by using the
internet
.
Therefore
,
people
should be
knowledge
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in
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about
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technology
to keep their money safe.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cashless society
  • digital payments
  • financial inclusion
  • technological infrastructure
  • transactions
  • privacy concerns
  • financial management
  • system failures
  • cyber-attacks
  • convenience
  • electronic payments
  • budgeting
  • financial information
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