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*In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word.* To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#*in #world #image #photograph #film #word
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 technology, Media concept e.g movies and photography has been the most effective method of conveying information rather than
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 document. I strongly agree
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 fact because visualized illustration can create a
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long lasting
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 memory in the audience and it can be easily applied.
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, pictorial perspective has been the most useful means of
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disseminating
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 of people because what they see,they hardly forget. Moreso most people find it difficult to sit down and read
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 penned
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 like
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 journals and brochures as these consumed most of
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 time.
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populace
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 both young and old, elites and illiterates can easily comprehend
with
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messages that were illustrated via media aid,
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, a movie skit
was produce
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 to create awareness
this
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 deadly virus,HIV/AIDS and the audience were able to understand the disease process, it's
mode
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a mode
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 of transmission and preventive measures.
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, some
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 may claim that written documents can be preserved for reference
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, unlike photography and images that are perishable.Still,the usefulness of illustrative materials
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 pertinent due to
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 positive impact on the subject matter,even if films were deleted the memory will still be fresh in the mind of the viewers. To sum it up,movie skits
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has
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 helped in passing information across in
a significant ways
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significant ways
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 and when other communication means
losses
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there
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 effectiveness,it will remain
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 potency because imaging info goes along with fun.
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