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Since the 18th century technological advances have replaced people in the workplace.with today's technology this process is happening at a greater rate.Technology is increasinly responsible for unemployment. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement ?

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As human beings get to evolve, they create tools to make their day-to-day life easy. In Each century, they achieve a new level in technology and discovery and nowadays, it is developing exponentially. Many people think that
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 will replace human resources and lead to unemployment. I agree with
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 statement, and in
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 will replace the
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 are moving towards automation for various reasons like height demand and production
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. In all these areas, humans are the legacy and
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 are using machines to overcome it.
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, One company want to increase production and quality. If they hire people,
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 they have to train them and have to manage different minds. It will
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, if they
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 robots, it is a one-time
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 and robots can work 24x7 with the same efficiency and accuracy.
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, another reason
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 have to
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 technologies is the lack of skilled
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. Some tasks need particular skills, and if they require more human resources in that work, they have to train other
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, it will take time and
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, rather than if
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 machine
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 they need to buy new machines to ramp up their production quickly To conclude,
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 have to
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 technology for different reasons like demand,
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 and lack of skilled
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 and
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 will definitely increase the unemployment in the near feature
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