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In some schools and universities, girls tend to choose art subjects (e.r. literature) and boys tend to choose science subjects (e.g physics) Why do you think this is so? Should this tendency be changed?

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Nowadays, some
boys
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 are interested in doing science
subjects
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 ,especially physics and girls
students
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 are willing to do literature
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. To be honest, to some extent
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 is correct and to some extent it is wrong. In ,addition if there is
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 type of tendency it will surely be changed, it will be discussed in
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 paragraphs.
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 of all, the girls' children are interested in learning things completely, while spending more time than
boys
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. So that, they are taking
subjects
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 like Malayalam and English literature and writing them well. Most of them are not listeners and they won't be having technical
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 and critical thinking ability. that's why they are more interested in these types of
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 .
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, most of them are interested in writing poems and novels .
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 is proof of their power of imagination. In my point of ,view
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 all are the reasons for girl
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 studying literature
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 more than
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.
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, for
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, they won't be interested in sitting and studying, most of them are quick learners and they are not willing to spend more time on their studies.
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, most of them are critical thinkers, and they are having some technical
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 than girls. most of them are interested in physics. Physics is a subject which includes, instrumentation. In conclusion, all
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 have
knowledge
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 about all
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. Based on our educational system,
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 won't be getting much
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 in all the
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, only one they prefer to study.
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