The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. What extent so you agree or disagree?

The environmental problems have been increasing significantly
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recent decades and affected
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every individual
lives
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. Some friends tell me that individuals can not do much to improve the situation so the
responsibility
of reducing the environmental damage is
depended
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on
government
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and big organizations. I am partially against
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opinion
opion
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opinion
because the biggest
organizations
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in
this
worlds
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is our 6-billion-individuals community. Educating
next
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generation about the
environment
play
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an important role to solve
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issues and it should be done by both teachers, family and
community
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the community
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. The wise man said that children
dont
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don't
follow our words, they follow our actions. Teachers and educated systems can teach children in school
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many lessons but the action of their family or community will influent their
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.
Secondly
, stopping or reducing pollutant
emission
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is
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another important target of
protect
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our
environment
.
Last
month, I read a Bill Gates' book in which I recognized that
indiduals
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individuals
emiss
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miss
emission
pollutant in every daily
actions
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such
as transport, using air conditions and ...cooking. After
know
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this
, I see my
responsibility
, see
every one
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responsibility
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in every daily
actions
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to protect our
environment
. Our
environment
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damage is
our
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huge
issues
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. Solving it,
saving
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and saving
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it
are
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is
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our
responsibility
from individuals to
government
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the government
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