The environmental problems that today's world is facing are so great that there is little ordinary people can do to improve the situation. So government and large organizations should be responsible for reducing the amount of damage being done to the environment. What extent so you agree or disagree?

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The environmental problems have been increasing significantly

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recent decades and affected

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every individual

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. Some friends tell me that individuals can not do much to improve the situation so the

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of reducing the environmental damage is

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government

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and big organizations. I am partially against

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because the biggest

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is our 6-billion-individuals community. Educating

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generation about the

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an important role to solve

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issues and it should be done by both teachers, family and

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. The wise man said that children

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follow our words, they follow our actions. Teachers and educated systems can teach children in school

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many lessons but the action of their family or community will influent their

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another important target of

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our

environment

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month, I read a Bill Gates' book in which I recognized that

indiduals

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pollutant in every daily

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as transport, using air conditions and ...cooking. After

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in every daily

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to protect our

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. Our

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environment

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damage is

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huge

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. Solving it,

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from individuals to

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