More and more young people from wealthy countries are spending time in communities in poorer countries doing unpaid work such as teaching or building houses. Why is this? Who benefits more from this, the communities or these young people?

Nowadays, a vast number of youngsters from developed
countries
are willing to fly overseas and provide voluntary
services
to underserved families from
Third
World nations. The paragraphs below will outline that whether as an unpaid professor, health professional or constructor, these
services
are important to broaden the volunteer's expectations of finding leadership jobs and to develop a sense of humanity.
Although
it impacts positively both sides, the communities
in least
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developed
countries
are more benefited.
To begin
with, there are several reasons to justify why
First
World
countries
' youth is involved in international humanitarian projects. One of which is simply professional, as it enhances the chances of filling leadership positions in major companies. Global enterprises see volunteering candidates as
proactives
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proactive
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important acquisition to their workforce
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since they have managed to deal with
people
with a lot of complaints and demands, in places where resources are scarce.
Secondly
, working with NGOs is
also
essential to
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, as
people
that are altruistic feel good about showing kindness and empathy. Despite the motivation that leads young
people
from great federations to accept
this
challenge and travel around the globe
practicing
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charity, they have to bear
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their costs alone, which sounds somehow unfair.
Conversely
, the
people
that are visited benefit by enjoying
services
provided without any cost, which are
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in some cases.
For instance
, every year, through the Humanitarian Program in Africa, thousands of humanitarian aids are provided and plenty of unpaid doctors, teachers and nurses travel to isolated communities in the continent to alleviate suffering and enhance the dignity of these
people
.
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To conclude, it is clear that the youngsters from developed nations who do voluntary
services
in least
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developed
countries
are motivated by getting hired in a
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position in the future and by their own humanity.
Nonetheless
, the poor communities, no matter how small it is, are more benefited from
this
action.
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