In some countries, secondary school aims to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which do you think is appropriate in today’s world?

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on good learning. Where are some majority of the people believe general subject learning is more important and some believe a single

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study is good. I strongly support,

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particular

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is more worthy. There are two main points, pupil

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better in selected

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and specialization generate higher

career

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opportunities

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opportunities

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, high school

students

are enough mature and they know their

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strengths

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better than anyone. Specific subject learning, particular their knowledge or skills in one direction but

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helps them to learn easily.

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is good in maths and science but he

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five

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subjects

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, he

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well if he

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only three

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in which he is good. In a nutshell, specific subject learning

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the

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confidence and skills. Specialization, means you have all the knowledge and skills related to the particular

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students

should have to choose

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background

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a engineering

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should have mathematics in their high school.

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in Neurology get more opportunity comparatively a plain

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medical

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student

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crystal

clear,

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multiple

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gives average result while particular learning

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your competitors. In conclusion, learning

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specific

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makes

students

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career

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bright. Selection of

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their confidence and specialization open up

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it is necessary to explore their interest

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