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In some countries, secondary school aims to provide a general education across a range of subjects. In others, children focus on a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. Which do you think is appropriate in today’s world?

#countries #school #education #range #subjects #children #focus #career #today’s #world
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Education is the backbone of the country and
the
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always
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 on good learning. Where are some majority of the people believe general subject learning is more important and some believe a single
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 study is good. I strongly support,
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in
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particular
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 is more worthy. There are two main points, pupil
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 better in selected
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 and specialization generate higher
career
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opportunities
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opportunities
. In
this
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 essay, I will discuss both points in paragraphs.
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, high school
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 are enough mature and they know their
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strengths
strength
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strengths
 better than anyone. Specific subject learning, particular their knowledge or skills in one direction but
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helps them to learn easily.
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, a
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 is good in maths and science but he
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 more
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subjects
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. It is difficult for him to study all the
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 at the same time.
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, he
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 well if he
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 only three
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 in which he is good. In a nutshell, specific subject learning
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 the
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 confidence and skills. Specialization, means you have all the knowledge and skills related to the particular
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. For the medical
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,
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 should have to choose
biology
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 background
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, as well as a engineering students,
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a engineering
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an engineering student
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students
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 should have mathematics in their high school.
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 is to say,
a
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students
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 who completed his
Masters
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 in Neurology get more opportunity comparatively a plain
bachelors
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 of
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student
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. It is
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crystal
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learning
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or
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multiple
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 gives average result while particular learning
filter
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 your competitors. In conclusion, learning
of
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specific
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 makes
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students
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career
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 bright. Selection of
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,
build
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 their confidence and specialization open up
career
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 paths for them. For every
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student
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 it is necessary to explore their interest
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 and pursue their
career
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 in the same.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broad foundation
  • well-rounded individuals
  • critical thinking skills
  • adaptability
  • specialized skills
  • job readiness
  • interconnected world
  • global economy
  • flexibility
  • pivot between careers
  • future-proofing
  • automation
  • transferable skills
  • holistic development
  • explore various interests
  • economic structure
  • workforce demands
  • local context
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