You have learned that a financial organisation in your city gives money as a loan to students who like to take a part-time course. You are interested to do the course and have decided to take a loan. Write a letter to a local financial organisation. In your letter, • give your qualifications and work experience • give details about the course • explain how this course will help you

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing

this

letter to request

you

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for

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an educational loan to pursue a part-time course. To commence with, I have completed

bachelor's

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a bachelor's

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degree in Electronics & Communication. I have 8 years of experience in information technology as a software developer and served for 4 years as a faculty at Ballari University. Moving onto the course, I want to seek Artificial Intelligence as it is

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trending and

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mostly

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widely used in all recent gadgets. By end of

this

course

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I will be able to write python programs and design mini

robot

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with

voice

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assistant

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Lastly

, these days almost every smartphone or home assistant

devices

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like Alexa,

Google

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home use

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technology to assist human beings with

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questions related

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all topics, as result, Many employers across the globe recruiting candidates with

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skills and training certificate. Please respond at your earliest convenience!. Yours Faithfully, Rana

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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
15Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

152 words

6.00

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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