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Some people believe that all the companies decisions should be decide by the managers, while others think it is better to include employees in decision. Discuss both side and give your opinion?

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In
management
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, the action of letting
employees
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 or subordinates make decisions is called empowering. There have been plenty of arguments on the ideal level of empowerment. Some
people
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 suggest that all decisions in a company should be made by manager grade or above, while others contend that it is beneficial to involve normal
employees
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 to ensure smooth operations. The
people
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 who support the former approach claim that
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 a
management
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 approach which mainly consists of instructions from above is most efficient. Higher
management
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 possesses information advantage that lower-level
employees
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 usually don't have, and
management
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people
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 are made managers because they are more qualified, are equipped with more advanced skills and can analyze the information in a righteous way.
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, they are the most suitable ones to make decisions.
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,
employees
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 may have different excuses and exaggerate the difficulties when they are consulted,
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 as resentment of undesirable hours, workload, strict timetables and so on. Over-reliance on
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' feedback can be counter-productive.
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, the critics of
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 approach say it is no longer working without empowerment. As the economical situation improves compared with decades ago,
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 now do not accept orders as willingly as their ancestors. They want to have their input on at least some execution steps of their companies' policies, they want to voice out their views,
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 as remuneration, fringe benefits, and responsibilities,
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otherwise
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 they would be annoyed and just quit. A high staff turnover is not necessarily a good thing
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 a company and may probably reduce its competitiveness. In conclusion,
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 an authorization-based
management
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 style worked efficiently in the past, it is no longer practicable in recent years. In my view, letting
employees
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 have their say in
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 process is imperative. Not only are
employees
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 not as obedient as before, but they
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 possess a lot of
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-hand information,
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 as customers' preferences in their daily communication processes, which is essential in decision making.
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