Some people think that children should start primary school as soon as possible,while others believe they should start school after reaching 7 years old.To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays, there has been a widespread argument that pupils

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to commence school right after they graduate from kindergarten, others believe that it would be excellent if they start to study before their

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, the faster the better. From my perspective, I strongly disagree that

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start their education very early. The following essay will elucidate my stance.

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and foremost, educational institutions do not suitable to

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desires

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as playing around rather than sitting in a class and listening to teachers.

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have a bunch of energy which needs to be deployed.

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, they cannot

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with structurize schedules.

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, educational curriculums require pupils to follow the rules. If

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have no ability to deal with

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, they will be overwhelmed because they are actually free

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children

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should be encouraged to regulate their emotions before starting formal education

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. Introducing them to emotional management is good for their mental, they will know how to deal with anger or

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when their expectation does not match with

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reality. As a consequence, they have a better standard to control their relationship with others.

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, parents should

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prioritise

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them to share with their friends and boost their

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empathy

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or emotional intelligence.

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, if they experience an unpredictable situation, it would prevent them from

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, despite those conditions, schooling after 7 years old is positive for their character development because they study with the patent system.

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, they will

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obtain social skills since they interact with many friends. To conclude, regardless

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benefit of getting into

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institution

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before 10 years old, I believe that educating them to regulate their emotions is better rather than encouraging

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to formally study.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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291 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

critical developmental period
foundational skills
learning difficulties
long-term academic outcomes
structured learning environments
emotional and social development
mental health
well-rounded development
natural pace of childhood development
cognitive and personal growth
mature emotionally and socially
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