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First impressions are important. Some people think that doing well in interviews is the key to securing a good job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many employers select their employees based on their performance in
job
interviews
. Personally, I disagree that interview performance is the decisive factor in the recruitment process
,
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 because I believe that other factors are equally important. On the
one
 hand, I agree that good
first
 impressions in
job
interviews
 can help secure a
job
 for two reasons.
Firstly
,
interviews
 offer an opportunity to showcase
one
's character strength.
For example
, candidates who get well prepared for
interviews
 are more likely to tell the interviewer their passion and dedication.
Secondly
, candidates who answer questions well in
interviews
 can demonstrate their ability to build rapport with the potential team.
This
 is why constructive communication is essential in the interview section.
On the other hand
, I would argue
experiences
 and
qualifications
 are more important factors
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 securing a good
job
. In fact, many professional
job
 positions weigh
experiences
 and
qualifications
 as
essential
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prerequisite
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 for employment.
For example
, for information technology jobs, relevant certificates are important
show
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one
's practical skills and relevant knowledge for the position.
Similarly
, for research positions, publications in reputable scientific
journal
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 are vital to show applicants' expertise in their field. For these positions,
experiences
 and
qualifications
 are more vital to tell whether or not the candidate has the competence for the position. In conclusion, while good
first
 impressions at the interview stage certainly
affects
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one
's chances of getting a
job
, I do not believe that
this
 factor outweighs
experiences
 and
qualifications
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • First impressions
  • Interviews
  • Securing
  • Communication
  • Preparation
  • Research
  • Performance
  • Qualifications
  • Confidence
  • Body language
  • Networking
  • Recommendations
  • Follow-up
  • Technology
  • Social media
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