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In some countries, young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

#countries #people #work #travel #year #school #university #studies
Taking a
year
 off is becoming
increasingly
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in
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for
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 young people for working and travelling before attending the
third
 level
education
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of education
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.
This
 essay will suggest that experience gained and
money
 saved are the biggest advantages of
this
 but delaying careers and reducing motivation to study are the primary disadvantages. The main advantages of a gap
year
 are learning more about the world and earning
money
.
For
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Students
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students
 who have finished
the
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high school take a
year
 to learn what life is like outside the world and how to deal with other people by working in
community
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the community
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 as a volunteer or travelling to different places where can know other cultures.
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, a student who works as a volunteer or part-time in
variety
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a variety
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of place
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place
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 can know the value of
money
 and save up
money
 before he begins his
studies
between
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taking a
year
. The result can be seen clearly in
students
 who gain their
career
 and what
feilds
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fields
 they want to choose in university.
On the other hand
, working and travelling after the completion of secondary school leads to a
year
 gap
breaks
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and breaks
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 the rhythm of
studies
. Some
students
 may find working more important or interesting when they start earning. Eventually, they will give less importance to their
studies
. Unfortunately,
this
 hunts their
career
 prospects. As an example, without having good
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academic
acedemic
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academic
 qualifications, it is impossible to find a good job or build a successful
career
. The gap
year
 can seriously affect the
career
 prospects of
students
 who lose their focus on
studies
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their studies
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. In conclusion, taking a break from
studies
 can be
advantages
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 if
students
 earn
money
 for their
career
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careers
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 and learn more about the world.
However
, they should
also
 be careful that it does not delay the start of their
career
 and lose their mood in
studies
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their studies
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural immersion
  • Life experience
  • Work ethic
  • Career readiness
  • Self-discovery
  • Delayed gratification
  • Intellectual stagnation
  • Financial implications
  • Social dynamics
  • Academic trajectory
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