You recently went to a concert and thought one of the singers was very good. You want to tell him how you feel. Write a letter to the singer. In your letter - say how you feel about his performance - give details of your music-related activities - explain how you would like him to help you with your music-related activities

Dear Sir, I am writing
letter to appreciate your phenomenal performance at
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the Newcera

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Global Ground
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Sunday. Indeed, I have never enjoyed
wonderful and energetic singing from any singer.
, one of your romantic songs ``Your charming eyes' ' stunned almost everyone with love and affection for their better half. Because I run a local
, I have listened to your pop songs and played with my
members at many ceremonies. Though our
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is not so big, we have 20k followers on an
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page where I teach various instruments online.
, I need a favour from you as I have recently heard that you always love to promote young talent on your page and in concert. If you post some of my
's videos of your songs on your social media, it will be a great help for us to get recognition in
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In addition
, since you have opened an open music studio for new performers, it will be an honour for us if you allow us to perform in it. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Thank you in anticipation. Best regards, Harry Brown
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