On a recent holiday you lost a valuable item. Fortunately, you have travel insurance to cover the cost of anything lost. Write a letter to the manager of your insurance company. In your letter Describe an item you lost Explain how you lost it Tell the insurance company what you would like them to do.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing in connection with a lost item which was covered under your insurance plan. I am a budding photographer and
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bought a DSLR a few days back to capture the landscapes.
This
camera had state-of-the-art functions and higher resolution.
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month, I had been to New
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for a vacation and, clicked tons of perfect snaps. One day, while soaking up the beautiful mountain views, I drained out the camera battery in the morning and kept it in my bag. After returning to the hotel room, I was taken aback to notice that it was misplaced somewhere. Luckily my travel agent had booked a travel insurance plan along with the holiday. As per the insurance policy, I request you to kindly release
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per cent value of the product. I will be sending the purchase bill for your reference and
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. Looking forward to your response. Yours faithfully, Devika
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