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As global trade increases, many goods including those we use on a daily basis are produced in other countries and have to be transported long distance. Do the benefits of this trend outweigh the drawbacks?

#trade #increases #goods #basis #countries #distance #trend
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WITH THE INCREASE IN GLOBALISATION MANY
PRODUCTS
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 INCLUDING REGULAR HOUSEHOLD ITEMS ARE BEING PRODUCED ELSEWHERE AND BEING TRANSPORTED TO US. IT REMAINS A TOPIC OF DEBATE WHETHER THE BENEFITS OF
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 OUTWEIGH THE DRAWBACKS. THE TWO SIDES OF
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 ARGUMENT WILL BE ANALYSED AND DISCUSSED IN
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 ESSAY BEFORE DRAWING A REASONED CONCLUSION. ON ONE HAND, AS GLOBAL TRADE INCREASES THE VARIETY OF OPTIONS AVAILABLE TO US IS
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 INCREASING. WE ARE ABLE TO PROCURE
PRODUCTS
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 FROM ANY PART OF THE WORLD. CONSUMERS ARE ABLE TO COMPARE THE PRICES OF PRODUCT OPTIONS THEY HAVE. BUYERS ARE
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 ABLE TO SHOP FOR GOODS WHICH WERE ONCE AVAILABLE ONLY LOCALLY IN A SPECIFIC COUNTRY OR REGION.
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, COCONUT SHELL ARTWORKS COULD ONLY BE PURCHASED FROM KERALA A FEW YEARS BACK BUT TODAY YOU CAN BROWSE THROUGH ONLINE SHOPS WITH THESE
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 OFFERING TO DELIVER IT WORLDWIDE.
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, LONG-DISTANCE TRANSPORTATION COMES AT THE COST OF ENVIRONMENTAL DAMAGE. AIR CARGO IS THE MOST COMMON MODE OF SHIPPING
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 TO LONG DISTANCES WHICH IS A MORE FUEL-CONSUMING METHOD LEADING TO AN INCREASE IN AIR POLLUTION.
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, THE LONGER THE DISTANCE A PRODUCT IS IN TRANSIT MORE IS THE PROTECTION REQUIRED TO PREVENT DAMAGES,
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 REQUIRING MORE PLASTIC FOR PACKAGING.
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, GOODS WE GET SHIPPED COME WITH HEAVY PACKAGING WHEREAS THE
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 WE BUY FROM OUR LOCAL MARKET HARDLY HAVE ANY PACKAGING OF THEIR OWN. IN ,CONCLUSION I WOULD SAY THAT WHILE GLOBAL TRADE HAS INCREASED CONSUMERS' BUYING OPTIONS IT HAS COME AT THE COST OF ADVERSELY AFFECTING OUR ENVIRONMENT. I WOULD RECOMMEND THAT BUYERS OPT TO BUY DAILY HOUSEHOLD
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 FROM THEIR LOCAL MARKETS.
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, HELPING THEIR LOCAL ECONOMY AND SAVING THEIR NATURE AT THE SAME TIME.
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