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In some country young people are encouraged to work or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

Nowadays, it is quite common in many nations for high
school
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 levers to take a break from studies before beginning learning integrity
institution
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. While pausing their
education
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 to earn a living or travel is bound to expose young people to experiences of
life
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, it can
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 result in
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lost
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 of interest in
education
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 for
life
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.
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 easy will focus on the merits and demerits of
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trend
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. Youngsters
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experiences
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and
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apply
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financial stuns when they are employed after high
school
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. Touring another country after secondary
school
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help
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 them to see
life
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 from another aspect as it
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 enabled them
choose
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 the path to follow. When working in a firm the individual can save money to support his studies in University and do knowledge gained can be used in Labour markets in future as they have the better resources to draw on. They tend more independent which is very crucial in academic study and research,
it's
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 gives them the advantage of coping with
life
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 challenges.
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, there are certain problems
in
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 taking
time
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the time
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 to continue
education
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. Young
adult s
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adults
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 may end up losing the interest to continue their studies, they may find it hard to readapt to
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school
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the school
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 environment and its stress. They may think that it is better to continue in a particular job or do something else other than
University
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a University
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 course.
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 a young adult earning some amount of money may not see the reason to continue
education
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 since that money may be more than enough to cater for his needs.
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 reason makes it confrontable to take some time off
that
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 important age. In
summary
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although
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 working or going to another country after secondary
education
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 is a good way of preparing teenagers for
future
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the future
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, it can
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 be detrimental as the individual may end up losing the enthusiasm to continue
education
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in
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 University.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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