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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweigh the advantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

#dangers #chemicals #food #production #preservation
Nowadays,
food
 industries rely on preservatives and
chemicals
.
Although
food
 processing using
chemicals
 enhances
food
 quality, the hazardous side of these substances is more powerful. I agree with the previous statement and I will justify my argument in the upcoming paragraphs.
Food
chemicals
 ‘taxonomy is variable.
For example
additives
, pesticides, and fertilizers. Each one of these
chemicals
 has a beneficial side and an immense harmful side.
To begin
 with
food
additives
such
 as preservatives,
flavours
, colours, and minerals.
However
 these
food
chemicals
 preserve
food
 from spoiling using materials like sugar and salt, they make us more susceptible to serious chronic diseases like diabetes, hypertension, and stroke.
Flavours
 are another example of
food
additives
. Fast
food
 is reliant on
flavours
 to come with
this
 delicious taste. But unfortunately, the taste is a silver lining, as many researchers proved that the majority of using
flavours
 are carcinogenic.
Moreover
, I should mention the colourful
food
. These attempting kinds of
food
 are considered the most hazardous ones, especially; for their target which is children. At the same time, currently, Agriculture involves using pesticides, and fertilizers on a large- scale. Every farmer uses either fertilizer or pesticide during the farming process. Due to the fact, that fertilizers can help crops to grow faster.
Moreover
, pesticides kill the wicked larva which eats the plants.
Conversely
, the WHO is against using
chemicals
 in agriculture because they can cause serious cancers in the long run of consuming.
Therefore
, the novel trend of using organic
food
 which is the
food
 was cultivated without using any
chemicals
. To summarize, in recent decades, the prevalence of
food
 processing increased exponentially. For the reason of the ability to increase
food
 production and preserving for a long time.
Conversely
, using
food
additives
 without limit affects our health negatively. So I would say, that we should reduce eating processing
food
.
Also
, the
food
 industry and authorities like FDA shall impose rules restricting using of
chemicals
 in
food
 processing.
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