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Public transport is essential but problematic. Describe some of the problems connected to public transport and suggest some solutions. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Thanks to public
transportation
 we are able to commute daily at considerable distances, without having to each drive a car, which in turn has
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 effect on the environment.
However
, public
transportation
 does have many challenges. Lacking convenient connecting lines, and comfort are some examples of its problems. In
this
 essay, I will share how creating convenient and complex routes and providing comfort to the commuters might help
people
 travel with ease and flow. Like most
people
 in our
city
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 I commute by bus and sometimes I wait for 30 minutes to an hour. I get frustrated and get a taxi
instead
. Buses are infrequent due to
long
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 lines they have to run,
moreover
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 with heavily congested
roads
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 it happens that all the buses get on one side of their route.
Instead
 of having long loops, it's best to have shorter distance loops with better interconnecting routes. It will certainly help with the waiting time. Another reason
people
 don't like
the
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public
transportation
 is that they are old, unclean and crowded. In
the
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recent
years
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 the city council did make an effort to bring more new buses,
however
, more numbers
needed
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to
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 the rural areas as well as in the busiest areas of
city
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the city
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. To conclude, even though
transportation
important
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is important
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 but has many problems, resolving them
help
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large
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 number of citizens long and short distances without delay. It will help considerably commuters, children and old
people
 alike. The more convenient and comfortable the means of public
transportation
 the more likely
people
 will prefer to travel through it.
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  • sustainability
  • emissions
  • inequality
  • congestion
  • economic feasibility
  • subsidies
  • infrastructure
  • overcrowding
  • commute
  • incentivize
  • service quality
  • reinvest
  • equitable access
  • fiscal responsibility
  • peak hours
  • public subsidy
  • taxpayer burden
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