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In many countries women and men are working full time. It is therefore, logical for women and men to share household works. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 fast-paced world,
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a full
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full time
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full-time
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 job plays a vital role in everyone's life. In many
nations
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both
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men
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 and
women
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 are involved in
full time
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full-time
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work
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 so some individuals think it is a logical reason to share the
household
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works
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work
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 between
men
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 and
women
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.In my point of view, I believe that
,
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 the
work
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 in the house should be shared by
both
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men
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 and
women
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,
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apply
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When they are going
for
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to
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a
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work
a job
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work
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.
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 with, the two individuals
men
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 and
women
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,who are taking
care
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 of their family, are working as
a
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apply
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full time
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full-time
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employee
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employees
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 to fulfil their needs.The major thing is to have
a good food
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good food
a portion of good food
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.
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, to provide a good education and
a
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apply
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quality
heathcare
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healthcare
 for their children, they need more money so
both
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 of them are working nearly
for
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apply
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a whole day. To illustrate, In a recent
survey
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,survey
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 it is mentioned that nearly 75% of the parents
both
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men
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 and
women
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 are
woking
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working
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 for
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their
thier
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their
 needs, all over the world.
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, in
early
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the early
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 days only
men
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 will go
for
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to
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work
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 and
women
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 will take
care
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 of the house.Later
this
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 situation changed due to economic
condition
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conditions
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. Nowadays,
both
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 of them are working so it will be
hectic
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the hectic
a hectic
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 situation for
a
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women
a woman
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women
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 to handle
both
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 job and
household
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work
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 in a day.By doing
this
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,
women
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 who are taking
care
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 of
both
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, are facing more
heath
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health
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 issues.
Moreover
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,most
of
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the
men
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 understand the situation and share the
household
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work
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 with their
partner
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partners
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.
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, in
recent
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a recent
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survey
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 it is shown that
india
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India
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 places the
first
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 place where
household
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work
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 is shared between
both
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 the working professionals. To conclude,
nowadsys
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nowadays
,
both
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 the life partners are engaged in
work
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 to meet their requirements so it is better to share their
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household
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house hold
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household
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 works between them.
By
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this
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 individuals,who take
care
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 of
both
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 are relieved from high
work
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,stress and
heath
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health
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 issues.
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