Many doctors say that people in today’s world do not enough physical exercise. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures are there to this problem?
Regular exercise is essential in maintaining a healthy body. It is a fact that nowadays a large number of companies should allow their employees to take 2-3 breaks, which
people
do not have sufficient physical activities. There are several reasons for such
a situation. The main two reasons are,
sedentary Remove the comma
apply
work
and poor diet. In this
essay
I will discuss both aspects in the ensuring paragraphs with Add a comma
,essay
solution
.
Discussing the reasons, the most common one is sedentary jobs. Add an article
a solution
the solution
This
is because,
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apply
maximum
number of Add an article
the maximum
people
doing
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do
work
from home due to hybrid
culture. Correct article usage
the hybrid
However
, these companies saving their
a large Correct pronoun usage
apply
of
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apply
number
of expenses while compromising Change the article
a number
the number
with
the Change preposition
apply
health
of their employees. For instance
, if an employee working
from home it seems suitable but they have to Wrong verb form
works
work
more than normal shifts. In this
case how the person will get some time for his fitness. By this
i
mean,Change the capitalization
I
Correct word choice
that
has
2 long breaks, where they can add some activities for their Correct subject-verb agreement
have
health
. Furthermore
, it is also
a Correct your spelling
responsibility
responsbility
of the employer to take care of their Correct your spelling
responsibility
workers
mental and physical Change noun form
worker's
workers'
health
.
Another reason of
less activity in humans Change preposition
for
are
poor diet. Change the verb form
is
Food
plays an important role in the development of both mental and physical health
. The foremost effect is seen in young people
who are not intrested
in Correct your spelling
interested
home cooked
Add a hyphen
home-cooked
food
as well as they add fast food
and sugar based
products in their daily meal. Add a hyphen
sugar-based
Moreover
, this
kind of meal make
them lazy and unfit. Change the verb form
makes
For example
, a
boy consumes Correct word choice
if a
breads
, soft drinks, fried foods etc on Change the wording
bread
pieces of bread
loaves of bread
slices of bread
daily
basis he will gain weight because of Add an article
a daily
fatty
body he feels heavy and even Add an article
the fatty
a fatty
cant
walk. In Correct your spelling
can't
this
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scenario
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scenario
scenerio
the government should increase the tax percentages on Add a comma
,scenerio
these kind
of foods so Change the determiner
this kind
these kinds
the
children or young Correct your spelling
that
people
will think before buying them.
Thus
, to conclude the topic it can be finally
commented that sedentary work
life and consumption of fast food
has
bad effects on Correct subject-verb agreement
have
human
body. So we would add more breaks for employees and increase the tax percentages for the Add an article
the human
fast
Add a hyphen
fast-food
food
as a suggestion. These are the possible solutions for the above problem of Correct your spelling
decrease
Correct article usage
a decreas
decreas
Correct your spelling
decrease
of
physical activity in humans.Change preposition
in
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