Many doctors say that people in today’s world do not enough physical exercise. What are the causes of these pressures and what measures are there to this problem?

Regular exercise is essential in maintaining a healthy body. It is a fact that nowadays a large number of
people
do not have sufficient physical activities. There are several reasons for
such
a situation. The main two reasons are
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sedentary
work
and poor diet. In
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. Discussing the reasons, the most common one is sedentary jobs.
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work
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culture.
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the
health
of their employees.
For instance
, if an employee
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from home it seems suitable but they have to
work
more than normal shifts. In
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case how the person will get some time for his fitness. By
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companies should allow their employees to take 2-3 breaks, which
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2 long breaks, where they can add some activities for their
health
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responsibility
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of the employer to take care of their
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mental and physical
health
. Another reason
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less activity in humans
are
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poor diet.
Food
plays an important role in the development of both mental and physical
health
. The foremost effect is seen in young
people
who are not
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food
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products in their daily meal.
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them lazy and unfit.
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boy consumes
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, soft drinks, fried foods etc on
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basis he will gain weight because of
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body he feels heavy and even
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walk. In
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the government should increase the tax percentages on
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of foods so
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children or young
people
will think before buying them.
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finally
commented that sedentary
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food
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bad effects on
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body. So we would add more breaks for employees and increase the tax percentages for the
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food
as a suggestion. These are the possible solutions for the above problem of
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physical activity in humans.
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