You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There is no doubt that improving
environment
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the environment
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is
a
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main aim for every individual on the earth. Environmental problems should be solved by
government
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the government
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, companies and all people around.
First
of
all
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I honestly disagree with
this
statement, simply because
natur
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natural
improvement is the duty of all society members
no
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with no
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expectations.
Environment
has-been
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has been
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improved by
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an individual
the individual
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individual
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individuals
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from past years. Companies and
government
organizations have their own role in keeping nature improvement as the
first
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interest
interst
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interest
in daily routine.
For
example
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government
encourage all organization members to help
improving
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natural environmental growth.
On the other
hand
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some people disagree with that .as if the individual was weak and can not improve
environment
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the environment
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in a real way. Persons who argued that are talking from their experience . In
conclusion
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I think in my own mind that improving
environment
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the environment
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is the responsibility of all the society members from younger children to all famous organizations and
government
.
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