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When choosing a job, the salary is the most important consideration. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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the people out there have problems when they are choosing their
career
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. Whether they should choose based on the size of salaries they offered or should they need to consider other
factors
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. As for me, I completely disagree with the idea of
money
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 being the
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 priority thing and I believe that other important
factors
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 should be considered as well. On the one hand, it is undeniable that
money
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 is the key factor in our society to meet their social and basic needs. We all need
money
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 to keep our life balanced.
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 as paying taxes, education and commuting fees, health care,
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 but not least housing and so on. It seems
money
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 can make life easier and simpler. It can
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 bring enjoyment to life. Whereas other people who choose the
job
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 which they love and are passionate about
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 it difficult to start a family and provide basic needs for them.
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, I strongly believe that other
factors
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 are
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 as important as salaries. Because we can not buy happiness and success in one business with
money
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. Having a loving and caring environment in the workplace is one of the most important things to consider.
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 it can really affect the mentality of employees and the quality of
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job
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 they do. People can feel like they can do anything in that kind of environment which can make the
job
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 done faster and develop the skills quicker.
Experience
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 they get in a
job
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 is more important than the
money
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 they have earned. To sum up, salaries are not that important compared to other
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while
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 choosing a career. I personally disagree with the idea of
money
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 being an important consideration.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consideration
  • sole factor
  • financial stability
  • security
  • motivating factor
  • dissatisfaction
  • demotivation
  • job satisfaction
  • overall well-being
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • flexible working hours
  • vacations
  • career growth opportunities
  • skill development
  • advancement
  • determining factor
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