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some think government spending on infrastructure (transport, housing etc) is considered the most important for a nation. while others believe that education health and hr values to be more important areas for government expenditure.Discuss both views and gave your opinion

#think #government #infrastructure #transport #nation #education #health #hr #values #areas #expenditure
Many people are of the view that expenditure on
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 and housing is highly valuable for the nation and
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 think that Education, medical infrastructure and social
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 values should be granted more from
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 budget. I,
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views. In the upcoming
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 both these views will be discussed along with my idea over it.
To begin
 with, there is no iota of doubt that faster movement of goods and better living spaces are one of the key pillars for the
development
 of a country. Better means of transport from sources like Road, Water, Air and Railways helps in intra-sharing of skills, Services, Products form different corners of the country. While residential building shows improved buying power of its’ citizens.
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 of the countries from the top to bottom in terms of growth where these Parameters are taken into consideration. So, Government’s spending on Infrastructural readiness leads to higher ranks.
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, other factors like literacy, Health facilities and living conditions of the people are equally important. An ideal society includes individuals with greater knowledge, free from diseases and well
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 among its residents. With Higher
development
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the nations are not only able to minimize their expenditure but
also
 will be able to create new avenues for revenue generation.
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 these fields they have Created a
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 society which in turn leads to brilliant idea generation which thwarted away numerous of their problems. To sum-up
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, it can be noted that both of the above two areas are different
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. Each of which holds a significant value. Providing money for either infrastructural or other
development
 indicators would eventually lead to Prosperity of the homeland.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic growth
  • job creation
  • foreign investments
  • business operations
  • traffic congestion
  • pollution
  • quality of life
  • homelessness
  • affordable living conditions
  • knowledgeable workforce
  • skilled workforce
  • innovation
  • productivity
  • public health
  • life expectancy
  • burden of diseases
  • employee satisfaction
  • employee retention
  • long-term benefits
  • immediate economic gains
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