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The international community must act immediately to ensure all nations reduce the consumption of fossil fuel ( gas and oil). To what extent do you agree or disagree. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#community #act #nations #consumption #fuel #gas #oil
There are various challenges when it comes to
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 the economy of
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one nation smoothly.
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 the change in certain rules
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 liable to look after the condition of the earth in future.
Therefore
, the international community should be responsive to warn all
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nations to decrease the consumption of fossil fuels
such
 as gas and oil. I lean towards the agreement of the statement by providing the possible statements with relevant examples.
Firstly
, Innovation
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 large scale demands
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lots of
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one country. They get used to it.
Consequently
,
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 caused
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huge pollution in the environment that led to the
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interruption
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 the natural climatic processes.
For instance
, the
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over use
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 of fossil
fuel
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 in vehicles and electricity generation produced various thermal gases.
As a result
, ice caps are now decreasing which
predicted
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in
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 the rise of sea level.
Hence
 rise in sea level will destroy the numerous natural habitats.
Secondly
, the transition is slow to get equipped with
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renewable
energy
.
In addition
 majority of the nation
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 upon
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fossil fuels and natural gas which
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 used to produce 24*7 electricity. Some nations are rather successful in installing
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renewable
energy
 acquiring devices which
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 totally eliminating
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pollution.
for example
, Solar panels are
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 effective way to get
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free
energy
. Some
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 of the US and India are now referring to
this
 technology which is
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resulting
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in
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effective steps from the international community. There is
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rigorous research to run heavy vehicles and warships as a challenge because
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 alternative is not enough. In conclusion, consumption of fossil fuels is significantly reduced all over the world and many
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the nations have implemented
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renewable resources to take a stand
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 sustainability.
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