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In the modern society, many people find themselves being awkward in social situations like face-to-face gatherings. What are the possible causes of this situation and how can we deal with it?

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Nowadays there is a huge number of imports which
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 to richer countries from our
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 world. Even though it is important for the national income,
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it causes
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environmental problems
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 as climate changes. On the one
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 people
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 badly on their nature, but they
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 need to earn living.
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 to that people work and produce a huge amount of products to gain money from imports.
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being
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never considered the effective issues which his industry is being caused to the environment around
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 factories
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 the
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 their gas emissions.
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 transportation companies
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 badly on
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nature by
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.
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 I full
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 with the statement that we should reduce these imports ,but the government could find
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 sources that help
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 our environment safe .
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 they can replace
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 with another one which uses a solar system.
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 they can put some effective rules on factories to use natural resources to save money and reduce
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 pollution. In
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 environmental issues are found in the world simply because human beings used the nature to serve their desires only ,and to save
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 we should aim to educate people
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 to treat the plant
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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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