An increasing number of people are buying what they need online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

#people #development

These days, many

people

especially youngsters

tent

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purchasing

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many things by online shopping. I strongly believe that

this

way is more beneficial than other ways which related to saving time and

protect

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our environment.

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of all, tent

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purchasing online shopping

save

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our time. At

this

moment, we are living with technology and our

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lifestyle

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life style

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lifestyle

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is becoming

change

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and

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easier. There are many applications on our mobile

phone

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phones

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and laptop which we can buy everything that we need.

For example

, we can compare and buy clothes, shoes or other things

with

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high quality that

are not existed

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in our country from other countries or continents. Another reason, that I insist

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buying from online shopping is

decrease

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a decrease

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traffic

jam

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jams

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crowded

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a crowded

the crowded

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city

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cities

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. If many

people

trust

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apply

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online shopping, they do not go out

with

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taxi, bus,

own

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car. So there are not many cars

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the streets and highways, and we can protect our environments by do not make use of fuels.

However

, some

people

especially elderly

people

claim that online shopping has some disadvantages. They said that there are many fraudsters in online shopping.

Therefore

, they cannot trust it and buying

are

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entertainment for them. To solve

this

problem, they can be buying from some stories

which

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they bought something before. In conclusion, many youngsters

prefer

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stay home and search

something

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for something

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that they wanted and buy it quickly

hence

they save their time.

Moreover

, they protect our environment by staying home.

Although

some

people

cannot trust

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online shopping, I strongly assert that

use

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using

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online shopping is more helpful for our

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lifestyle

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life style

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lifestyle

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1Word repetition
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Topic Vocabulary:

instant gratification
rapid advancement
instant communication
online shopping
fast food delivery
social media platforms
immediate feedback
recognition and validation
efficiency
productivity
convenience
decreased patience
delayed gratification
realistic expectations
work ethic
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stress
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