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Some people say history is one of the most important school subjects. Other people think that in today’s world subjects like science and technology are more important than history. Discuss these views and give your opinion.

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TOPIC
 6:
In addition
 to making a profit, businesses
also
 have social responsibilities. I completely agree, since businesses do a lot for society than just making money.
TOPIC
 7: It is true that many
people
 are moving to cities looking for a better life but living in the city has it's own difficulties
such
 as traffic, pollution, crime... In my opinion, the government should try and reduce these problems to make city life much easier.
TOPIC
 8: It is true that in some countries, many
people
 want to live by themselves at the present time than in the past. In my view,
this
 has a more negative view than positive because living alone can cause depression and boredom.
TOPIC
 9: It is true that some
people
 believe that university students should study their desired subjects
while
 others argue that they should only study subjects that are more beneficial in the upcoming years
such
 as science and technology. I believe that every student should have the right to study subjects they enjoy.
TOPIC
 10: It is true that ex-prisoners become good members of society and it is discussed that these are the best
people
 to speak to youngsters about the perils of committing a crime. I completely agree with
this
 because they can share their experiences and prevent them from doing something they might regret later on.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural heritage
  • Historical perspective
  • Analytical skills
  • Contextual understanding
  • Technological advancements
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Mathematics)
  • Innovation
  • Interdisciplinary
  • Job market
  • Climate crisis
  • Cultural identity
  • Critical thinking
  • Humanities
  • Contemporary issues
  • Integration
  • Tech-savvy
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