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Some universities now offer their courses on the Internet so that people can study online. Is this a positive or negative development? Discuss both sides Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#universities #offer #courses #internet #people #study #development
Education is the tool for
improvement
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 of one's professional skills that help
students
 to advance their careers. To make learning more accessible and bring in
students
 from all parts of the world, universities are offering their courses online. In my opinion,
although
 there are some drawbacks
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 online learning, it is largely a positive development. On one hand, proponents of online studies say that online studies open opportunities for
wider
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 variety of
students
 who
otherwise
 won't be able to attend university
classes
.
On the other
hand
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 the opponents of online education claim that being there physically in the room interacting with fellow
students
 and teachers is what provides
invaluable
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 learning experience that online learning simply can't replace. Both sides of
this
 argument have valid
point
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points
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. Online learning makes it accessible to anyone in the world to study a subject without having to travel the distance, find accommodation and other related high fee incurring arrangements.
However
, being in the classroom with fellow
students
 and teachers does provide
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 atmosphere
thus
help
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students
 absorb more through communication that goes on in that environment. In my opinion, it's best to have some online
module
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 as well as
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in person
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classes
 to benefit from the advantages of both sides of the argument. In
this
way
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 the fee is not going to be as high, and sometimes there are some
classes
 that can not be offered online
such
 as
experimentations
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 dealing with chemicals or special machines. To conclude, despite the opposing ideas it is good to make education accessible by offering online
classes
 incorporating it with
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in person
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classes
.
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  • Distance learning
  • Flexible schedule
  • Virtual classroom
  • Digital resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Asynchronous learning
  • Synchronous learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Self-paced study
  • Technical difficulties
  • Blended learning
  • Online modules
  • Remote access
  • Student engagement
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