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The young today spend a large amount of their time in the shopping mall. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this issue?

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Nowadays, youngsters are willing to purchase products from shopping
malls
. Some people think that it is not a good thing but others do not admit to
this
. the merits and demerits related to
this
 topic are discussed in the
further
 assuring paragraphs.
First
 of all, most young people spent their free time in the shopping mall, not only purchasing things but
also
 wanting to be familiar with the new trends. Frankly speaking, shopping
malls
 contain many shoppes
such
 as refreshment bars, coffee shops, ice cream bars, various shops et al,
however
, it is a stress-releasing method.
Furthermore
, most youngsters are working in a compactable environment, so they have to go to shopping
malls
 for mind relief.
Secondly
, in the present situation visiting shopping
malls
 continuously is not yet recommendable. Because so many communicable diseases especially Covid 19 are spread recurrently from
such
 places. So the young people maximum use online shopping sites for their purchases and spend more time with their families. In conclusion, a continuous visit to the shopping mall causes many negative effects in
this
 pandemic situation but it having positive effects than negatives. if all young generation wants to visit shopping mall-like places take safety measures and self vigilant.
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