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With advances in technological communication, more and more people are able to work from home. This increase of homeworking had been of real benefit to workers. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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As the internet has been benefiting mankind since the start of its invention, more & more people have been introduced to the
work from
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home
lifestyle
. Though
this
 kind of
lifestyle
 may make a person feel isolated, it has
also
 proven to be effective in terms of increased
productivity
 and reduced costs for commuting to
work
.
Hence
, I believe that working from one’s
home
 might be the future
lifestyle
 of convenience for the workers. As
productivity
 is one of the main factors of every workplace, the mentioned
lifestyle
 has increased the
productivity
 rate by many folds.
This
 is because of the flexibility of working hours that the
employees
 can enjoy
instead
 of a fixed nine to five regime.
For instance
, workers now don’t have to worry about the deadlines set by superiors. Even though there are still deadlines, workers can set their own deadlines as they don’t have to waste their time
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commuting or having to give
specific
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 time
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 their loved ones.
This
 can result in the increased comfortability and
productivity
 of the
employees
. Despite the above arguments, working from
home
lifestyle
 can affect the mentality of a worker due to the isolation from the
work
 community. To give an example, there will be a lack of communication with coworkers and supervisors.
This
 can lead to misunderstandings of the assignments and tasks that were delegated. The more the mistakes, the more the
employees
 feel the lack of motivation to improve themselves. I believe that there are more than described pros and cons of working from
home
.
Although
 working from
home
 is ideal for
productivity
 and cost reduction, there are
also
 side effects that can affect both employers and
employees
 in terms of maintaining the relationship. In my opinion, people tend to enjoy
work
 from
home
lifestyle
 more than working in the office.
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