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Task 2 academic In some countries, more and more people are becoming interested in finding out the history of the house or building they live in. What are the reasons for this? How can people research this?

#countries #people #history #house #research
There is no doubt that in the past years a great majority of
people
 were using
internet
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 most of the time neglecting the
history
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 and focusing on social media only, but nowadays more and more
people
 start to focus and become interested to explore
history
 related to their home town buildings and houses. The questions
is
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 what are the causes and how they can do
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research
researchs
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, in
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 reasons and the different ways they can do
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research
researchs
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research
.
People
 during the
last
 period of time were using social media
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a lot
alone
 without any enhancement in their life only to be lazy with no more
informations
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 to be up to date, to know your past
history
 about our ancients is very interested
it's motivate
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 the
people
 to be more aware and active. How to be active and increase
self esteem
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 and confidence that
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 can do more and more in our lives.
People
 can use
internet
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 to search for
the
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accurate
informations
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information
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, articles and pictures to learn, but some
people
 don't prefer the
using
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 of modern technology, here is the turn of libraries with
a great sectors
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 of books and paper articles as well. As we live in Alexandrine there is a historical building name (Qautbai fort) as we read more and more we can dig up more and more
informations
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 about it, as the tear it was built in, the structure, the materials used for that, the reasons why the ancients built it in
this
 particular area in front of the sea. Now it becomes a historical place to visit for all ages to witness the
magnificent
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 of the building. In
conclusion
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 we are should motivate children to read and search about their ancient
history
 to be proud of, increasing
the
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 awareness and not leaving them only for video games, they are the future of the countries. Be proud of your
history
 and dig it up,
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Historical research
  • Genealogy
  • Architectural styles
  • Heritage
  • Relics
  • Oral history
  • Archival records
  • Museum exhibits
  • Historical societies
  • House tours
  • Renovation projects
  • Original blueprints
  • Careful documentation
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