Some people think that it would be better for large companies and industry to move to the regional areas outside large urban centres. Do you think the advantages outweight the disadvantages?
According to
some
the are benefits for industries and companies to move to suburbs. In my opinion, Add a comma
,some
advantages
of Correct article usage
the advantages
this
are
definitely Unnecessary verb
apply
outweighs
the disadvantages.
There are possible drawbacks for businesses of moving outside cities Correct subject-verb agreement
outweigh
such
as the costs of this
move and possible infrastructure loss. Moving the
large Correct article usage
a
manufacture
Replace the word
manufacturer
to
anywhere is a huge cost itself, and if we count possible logistic risks we will see for sure the cost rise. If we consider a factory which takes needed materials from the city, Change preposition
apply
for
instance
the waste recycling plant which takes waste from the city, we see that logistic costs increase depending on how far it will be located. Another example is a clothes factory which takes fabric from the textile production nearby.
Despite Add the comma(s)
,instance
minor
disadvantages above, from the Correct article usage
the minor
long term
Add a hyphen
long-term
perspective
the advantages definitely Add a comma
,perspective
outweighs
Change the verb form
outweigh
such
as pollution production, mitigation of water contamination and subsequent litigations which can cause huge budget deprivation. For instance
, if we take a waste recycling plant for the example above and imagine that something went wrong and a plant has suddenly started to contaminate surrounding water pumps which leads
to human diseases the company will go Change the verb form
lead
to
Change preposition
into
bankruptcy
and the owner will possibly get to prison. So Replace the word
bankrupt
such
risk mitigation is important and the profit of moving companies far from urban areas makes sense.
In conclusion, there are advantages Correct your spelling
much
such
as pollution, human safety and other risks
mitigation which Change the noun form
risk
are definitely costs
moving to regional areas despite money lost to logistics.Change the verb form
definitely cost
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite