You are in a hospital with a broken leg.Your colleagues have sent you get well soon greeting cards and gifts.Write a letter to them and include : Thank them for everything Explain how you spend time in the hospital Inform them about your recovery process

Dear All,
I's
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I was

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overwhelmed when I received your get well soon cards and lovely presents.I'd like to thank all of you for
such
a nice gesture.
Its
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It's

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been five days ,
to
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since

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me
Correct pronoun usage
I

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in
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was in

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this
hospital.Most of the time, I watch Television which is available in my room.Since
,
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apply

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I am staying in a deluxe room of the hospital,
therefore
, there is no other patient to talk
.
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to.

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Sometimes. I feel isolated and bored , at that time I use my mobile phone and watch some videos on YouTube.I
also
see our office daily videos which you guys upload on our company's Facebook page. I want to tell you,
I'm
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that I'm

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recovering with jet speed and all credit goes to my hobby of playing football due to which I have strong leg muscles that are helping me in my recovery process.Hopefully ,I'll join the office
next
week. Once again , I want to thank you all.Whatever you all did for me , It really means a lot to me. Eagerly waiting to meet you all in the office. See you soon, Sourabh.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

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