Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living . What is your opinion about this? What other times in history would be interesting to live in?
Certain individuals are of the view that the best National Bureau
period
on record to inhabit is the current moment .In this
essay I will be sharing my believe
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beliefs
; and
provideChange the punctuation
, and
;
other
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another
period
on record which is fascinating to exist.
In my point of view , I completely disagree with that school of thought because of the reasons stated below.
Firstly
, this current days
are characterised Change the determiner
this current day
these current days
with
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by
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the pandemic
a pandemic
pandemic
. The issues arising from Fix the agreement mistake
pandemics
this
diseases Correct determiner usage
these
has
crippled the economy all over the world. There Correct subject-verb agreement
have
are
massive Change the verb form
is
increment
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increments
of
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in
consumable
,and Add an article
the consumable
non consumable
products price. There Add a hyphen
non-consumable
are
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is
also
global economic met
down,countries are closing their borders against foreigners who want to study or migrate to those nations, Correct your spelling
melt
consequently
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,consequently
this
has led many Nations of the worldAdd the comma(s)
, for example,
for example
Nigeria
my home country to keep borrowing from IMF( International Monetary Fund),to fiance
the Nation's Budget . Correct your spelling
finance
Secondly
, these days are perilous
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a perilous
period
across the Nations record because insecurity and terrorism has
taken over the peace of national existence; Change the verb form
have
this
has threaten
the very fabric of our Nation Change the verb form
threatened
Nigeria
, as farmers no longer farm due to fear of being killed or kidnapped by bandits, which in turn they demand some ransom ,and releasing their victim after ransom deposit is not guaranteed .Thirdly
, this
current season in human
book is characterised by unemployment. In Add an article
the human
Nigeria
my country about 75% of university graduatesAdd a comma
,Nigeria
are
job seekers, despite having all Change the verb form
is
necessary
qualificationsCorrect article usage
the necessary
,
and meeting all Remove the comma
apply
prerequisite
. Fix the agreement mistake
prerequisites
For instance
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,
Statistics
in Change preposition
of Statistics
Nigeria
with
conjunction with IMF, Change preposition
in
in
2020 established the fact of massive unemployed individual youths in the country ranging from 60-75% teaming population of the Nation. Fourthly the season and Change preposition
apply
period
we are in is
synonymous Change the verb form
are
to
youths and Change preposition
with
teenagers
restiveness which is Change noun form
teenagers'
teenager's
aftermath
of unemployment and Add an article
the aftermath
an aftermath
subsequently
leading
to "Making fast money syndrome",which involve internet scam,Yahoo plus, etcetera.
In reiterating my view, I believe the excellent Wrong verb form
leads
period
to live was
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in was
precolonial
era,Add an article
a precolonial
the precolonial
18th
century as it was narrated by my parents, and widely circulated Correct article usage
the 18th
on
National Dailies. In those days, there Change preposition
in
were
free education, Change the verb form
was
barest
minimum of unemployed, insecurity, and youth restiveness resulting Add an article
the barest
to
Change preposition
in
saner
society.
In conclusion,several individuals opined that the best Correct article usage
a saner
period
to inhabit is the current era, but in this
essay
I was able to provide my Add a comma
,essay
stand point
which I vehemently disagree with those Correct your spelling
standpoint
school
of reason due to the effect of killing ,hunger,restiveness, money ritual etcetera .Fix the agreement mistake
schools
In addition
to above
, I provided the most excellent era in Correct article usage
the above
18th
century Correct article usage
the 18th
which
education is free, a minimum outbreak of disease, and heinous activities ; Change preposition
in which
this
has made the Add a hyphen
pre-colonial
pre colonial
time, more liveable.Add a hyphen
pre-colonial
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