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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living . What is your opinion about this? What other times in history would be interesting to live in?

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Certain individuals are of the view that the best
period
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 on record to inhabit is the current moment .In
this
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 essay I will be sharing my
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 provide
other
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period
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 on record which is fascinating to exist. In my point of view , I completely disagree with that school of thought because of the reasons stated below.
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this current days
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this current day
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 are characterised
with
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the pandemic
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pandemic
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. The issues arising from
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 diseases
has
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 crippled the economy all over the world. There
are
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massive
increment
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of
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consumable
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,and
non consumable
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 products price. There
are
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also
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 global economic
met
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 down,countries are closing their borders against foreigners who want to study or migrate to those nations,
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consequently
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this
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 has led many Nations of the world
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Nigeria
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 my home country to keep borrowing from IMF( International Monetary Fund),to
fiance
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 the Nation's Budget .
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period
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 across the Nations record because insecurity and terrorism
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 taken over the peace of national existence;
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 has
threaten
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 the very fabric of our Nation
Nigeria
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 , as farmers no longer farm due to fear of being killed or kidnapped by bandits, which in turn they demand some ransom ,and releasing their victim after ransom deposit is not guaranteed .
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 current season in
human
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 book is characterised by unemployment. In
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Nigeria
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,Nigeria
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 my country about 75% of university graduates
are
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 job seekers, despite having all
necessary
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 qualifications
,
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 and meeting all
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.
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National Bureau
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 in
Nigeria
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with
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 conjunction with IMF,
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2020 established the fact of massive unemployed individual youths in the country ranging from 60-75% teaming population of the Nation. Fourthly the season and
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 we are in
is
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to
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 youths and
teenagers
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 restiveness which is
aftermath
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the aftermath
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 of unemployment and
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leading
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 to "Making fast money syndrome",which involve internet scam,Yahoo plus, etcetera. In reiterating my view, I believe the excellent
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 to live
was
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precolonial
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a precolonial
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 era,
18th
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 century as it was narrated by my parents, and widely circulated
on
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 National Dailies. In those days, there
were
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 free education,
barest
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 minimum of unemployed, insecurity, and youth restiveness resulting
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saner
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 society. In conclusion,several individuals opined that the best
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 to inhabit is the current era, but in
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essay
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 I was able to provide my
stand point
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 which I vehemently disagree with those
school
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 of reason due to the effect of killing ,hunger,restiveness, money ritual etcetera .
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above
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, I provided the most excellent era in
18th
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 century
which
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 education is free, a minimum outbreak of disease, and heinous activities ;
this
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 has made the
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pre-colonial
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pre colonial
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 time, more liveable.

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