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some people think that humans can use animals in any way for their own benefits. others, however, believe that people should not use animals in the wrong way. discuss both this views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that
animals
 can be misused by
humans
 for their own benefits while others think that
animals
 must not be mistreated.ln my opinion,
animals
 must be taken
care
 of at all
the
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.
This
 essay will discuss the views and give reasons for my opinion.
Firstly
, mistreating
animals
 is a crime in most parts of the world and it is
also
 cruelty.
Animals
 are known to be human friendly but sometimes when they are mistreated they get violent and attack
humans
 , for
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instance
intance
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instance
, dogs are mostly domesticated but they do bite people in so many cases due to people's
behaviors
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 towards them,
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 some cruel individuals do not even feed and
care
 for the
animals
 but misuse their abilities.
Secondly
,
although
 l believe that
animals
 need to be cared for , some
humans
 believe that
animals
 are to be used only for their
benefits
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, they feel it is a waste of money and time to take
care
 of a non _human thing,
for example
, in some parts of the world a donkey is used for farming, and some other domestic work
hence
 it is not given food and
care
, the animal is expected to find its own food and water,
moreover
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 some of these donkeys are beaten during the process of farming whereby they get hurt . To sum up,
animals
 have feelings just like
humans
 so it is necessary for them to get love and
care
not
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 be abused in the process
of
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 people's
benefits
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benefit
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.
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