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Some people think that people in senior positions alone should make decisions in a business, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, along with the booming business, the importance of equity has aroused people's attention. Some people believe that employees should be involved in making
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 while others believe that only people
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 senior positions should be held accountable. In my opinion, I believe salaried
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 should be included in the company's
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 process for the following reasons. Admittedly, senior managers normally are knowledgeable and rich in work experience, so they can make
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 decisions maximising
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 of enterprises.
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 of employees is more important to the
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existence
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existence
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. Taking into consideration the opinions of
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 enables managers to make a balanced decision. It could prevent supervisors from sacrificing the welfare of
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 team members and
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conflicts
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 within the company. Ultimately,
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 relationship between managers and
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 subordinates.
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