In many part of the world, it is common for one parent to stay and home and raise a newborn child while the other works full-time to earn money. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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commonplace that

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stay

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at home to bring up the

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while the other is the breadwinner of the family in many countries. In my point of view, I think the advantages outweigh the disadvantages. On the

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might have an adverse impact on the relationship of the couple. While the

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chores or run errands, the other is busy with work and business appointment. The people and the things that they encounter during

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completely different.

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, or even there is no chance to interact if the working spouse has to work overtime.

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, they feel distant from each other even

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live under the same roof.

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children

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raised by their

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choose

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to stay at home and spend their time bringing up their

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to have a closer relationship with them. At the same time, the

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can witness the

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drawing and so on, which could give a sense of achievement and happiness

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leads to a family of harmony and love. In

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raise the

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at home while the other works a full-time job to earn money

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it has a negative impact on the couple's relationship.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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302 words

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In many part of the world, it is common for one parent to stay and home and raise a newborn child while the other works full-time to earn money. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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Nowadays many people choose to be self employed rather than work for a company or organisation. Why is this the case ? What are the disadvantages?

Schools should use films, computers and games instead of books. To what extand do you agree or disagree?

Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

some university students want to learn about other subjects, discuss both the view that is important and the view that studying for a qualification should be the priority