WRITING TASK 2 Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

It is widely known that currently many food and drinks contain a high level of
sugar
that can
causes
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health
problems, some
people
believe to tackle
this
problem sugary products should be made more expensive. I totally understand
with
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this
argument.
However
, I completely disagree because
to make
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people
consume less
in
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apply
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sugar
isn't only about the
price
but the
self awareness
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.
to encourage
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people
to consume less
sugar
by
increase
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the
price
of
the
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sugary
product
isn't
the
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wise decision. The main problem is
the
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people
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people's
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awareness
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of their
health
condition so they can reduce
the
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their
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consume
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consumption
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of
sugar
.
For
instance
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when
people
knowing
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their
sugar
blood rates they will be aware of the food ingredient of the
product
and consume less
sugar
product
. Increasing the
price
of
sugary
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product
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might be easy to implement but isn't
longer
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lasting if the
people
still ignored their
health
condition
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conditions
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. To summarize eating
sugar
may increase someone's sense of fulfilment.
However
, consuming a lot of
sugar
may harm your
health
conditions. Encouraging
people
to consume less is more than just a
price
it
also
need
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education
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to increase
self awareness
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • sugary products
  • excessive sugar consumption
  • discourage
  • promote
  • healthier choices
  • reduce
  • increased taxes
  • fund
  • health education
  • prevention programs
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