Some people think that getting a degree from a university is the best way to guarantee a good job others believe that it would be better to go straight into work and get experience instead.

Some would argue that getting a level from
university
gives the right way to guarantee a high-quality
job
, while other say that it would be
preferably
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to directly take a
job
and get experience
instead
. While some people would agree with losing
time
at
university
, I believe that it is better to apply there and get some knowledge. On the one hand, studying at
university
is a waste of
time
. In fact, it takes four years and some people think that
instead
of studying, it would be better to apply
to
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a
job
and get some new skills and experience.
For example
, I have a friend, who used to be my classmate
now
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and now
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works while he has a chance to enter
to
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apply
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university
but he thinks it is not important.
However
, I believe that studying is the best way to get much better and
fascinating
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work.
On the other hand
, it is known that while you are
practicing
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in your faculty, you spend a lot of
time
on
researches
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research
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, reports and other tasks which gives you a lot of new information.
This
data will be needed in your future profession.
For example
, it is always important
to
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good companies
get
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interviews before you get a chance to work there and
if
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it
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would
perfect
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if you know everything about
you
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job
. I believe that
this
method is preferable because it will lead you to work in any high-level business companies etc. In conclusion,
although
people believe that taking part at
university
is a waste of
time
, it is important to get a degree in your faculty.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • higher education
  • specialized fields
  • job prospects
  • earning potential
  • formal education
  • networking opportunities
  • career advancement
  • practical skills
  • work environment
  • financial independence
  • high costs
  • skills and experience
  • formal education
  • prioritize
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