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You had applied to City College recently, now the college has written back saying the course you applied for is full and they have even suggested an alternative course. Write back to them stating:- - Why did you choose the first course? - Your views on the suggested second course - Your plan of action

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Dear Sir, With due respect, I am writing
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 letter to put forward my concern about the alternative
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 of
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.E. IT that you have suggested in your reply to me. At the onset, since
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.Tech IT professionals are in high demand on an international level, I chose
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course
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 so it could have increased my professional opportunities in the future.
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, as you mentioned that the seats are full in
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course
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, I do not think the alternative
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 of
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.E. can be suitable for me. Because I have checked international education evaluation websites,
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 new
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 is yet to be listed on these.
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, I request you to put my name
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 the waiting list
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.Tech IT. If any student shifts from the
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, please consider my name on
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 priority basis. Because the suggested
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 is not fulfilling my international job requirement, I am not able to select
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. Thank you for suggesting an alternative
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 to me. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Harry Brown
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