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Many people feel that students should learn from online materials while others feel that it is better to use printed materials. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #students #materials
Nowadays,
due
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 the modern technology, a number of people think that online
resources
 are beneficial for
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students.
Nevertheless
, some people
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 that
resources
 that are printed
is
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are
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 more advantageous for the pupils. The use of
internet
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the internet
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 for studying is considered a breakthrough for students today. It is more convenient for
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them as well as
parents
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their parents
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 due to the fact that they do not need to go to
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the library
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 in searching for their assignments or projects.
Moreover
, not only
they
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do they
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 save time but
also
 money
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 the transportation. Aside from that, learning
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online has an advantage in
such
 a way that it is paperless.
For instance
, a student can just surf the net and save the topics on a disk or on its desktop. As
such
, it is not a burden for the parents to spend money
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 the printer, ink and paper.
On the other hand
, there are others
feel
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 that it is better for printed materials like books because of
lack
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the lack
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 of
resources
 from the family. Parents have to spend a
lot
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 money
in
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on
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 buying
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a computer
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computer
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computers
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 at the same time allocation of their minute income for the subscription
of
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 internet line.
For example
, people who are living
from
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 far rural areas who
has
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 no connection
of
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to
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internet
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the internet
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 and no means of
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acquiring
aqcuiring
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acquiring
necessary
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the necessary
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 tools for
the
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online learning.
Consequently
,
government
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the government
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 is helping them to install computers
on
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 each school
at
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 far places. In conclusion, I strongly believe that the use of online
resources
 for learning has more benefits than
the
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printed materials.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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