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Some people think that boys and girls should attend school together. Others feel that they should be educated separately. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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With the thought of
students
 of different genders studying together or separately, there are different opinions,
However
, while some believe that boys and girls should get educated separately, I agree with those who feel that they should be a process of co-education in every educational institution. On the one hand, it could be argued that it is easy for the teaching staff to concentrate on every individual student if there are less number of
students
 available in the classroom, and
also
 it helps them in noticing the weak points of a student and helping them
accordingly
.
Moreover
, those who support separate education
also
 believe that the schools can promote more male sports activities and allow individuals to participate in different sporting events.
However
, I believe that there are more arguments on getting educated together, one point could be that it will be easy for schools to manage campus arrangements for the
students
, they do not require any different blocks or separate classrooms for
students
 and they can get educated together at one time. I would argue that if there are more
students
 in the classroom
then
 there will be more competition among them, and
this
 can help
students
 to get better motivation from seeing each other and performing better in their academic results. To conclude,
although
 it is undeniable that studying differently can help tutors to concentrate well on
students
, it
also
 helps the
students
 in many different ways.
Therefore
, on balance, I believe that if
students
 get
an
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education together
then
 it will help them in many aspects.
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