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Some people argue that girls and boys should be educated separately, while others think that it is more advantageous for children to study at the same school. What is your opinion?

#people #girls #boys #children #study #school
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In recent years, along with the spread of gender equality education, there is a growing number of
people
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 who believe gender-based
schools
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 should be abandoned as they encourage a more inclusive classroom for
students
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. While some others believe segregated education is beneficial to participants' academic performance. Personally, I am a strong supporter of co-educational
schools
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. Admittedly, single-sex
schools
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 can help
students
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 improve their academic performance since it rules out many
distractful
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distrustful
 elements for their
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,
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 as early dating and sexual assaults.
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, mixed
schools
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 can facilitate idea exchanges between male and female
students
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 and contribute to the development of healthy relationships among children.
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, many scientific studies reveal that youngsters who are exposed o different sexual identities appear more open-minded than their peers. They are very tolerant of
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 from different backgrounds and show more respect to
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 of different genders.
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, inclusive classrooms are ideal places where younger generations learn to cooperate with other genders. Given many positions require different genders to work together, employers value the capability of cooperation and communication the most, so they would give priority to candidates who have strong reconciliation skills. Recent studies found out many candidates attribute
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 a skill to the training in their childhood. Getting along well with their colleagues regardless of their gender can be an asset for job seekers in the
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. In conclusion, we can clearly tell that single-sex
schools
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 have their advantages.
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,
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 education is much preferable as it improves
people
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's cooperation abilities.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Single-sex education
  • Gender stereotypes
  • Co-educational system
  • Social development
  • Gender equality
  • Psychological impacts
  • Collaborative skills
  • Diversity of opinions
  • Comprehensive social development
  • Equal access to resources
  • Educational environment
  • Distractions
  • Real-world scenarios
  • Academic advantages
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