Adults do less exercise these days. Some people think that showing sports events on the television such as the Olympics and international tournaments is the best way to encourage adults to do exercise. Others believe there are more effective ways to do so. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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television

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more effective for

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to get involved in doing

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. While others think that there are more ways to do

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conclusion. On the one hand, the former

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will get more inspired while watching

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on television and will decide to go for

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match on TV , they will

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interested in playing that for a while.So for the football too.

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several clubs or association which involves gym, yoga, laughing clubs, jogging , walking etc.

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will help the

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to do

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exercise

in a sociable and enjoyable atmosphere.

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in meeting friends and doing activities. Having analysed both the views and points , I tend to stand with the latter

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will help

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to lead a happy and balanced life.

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should maintain a healthy

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by their own means, whatever the ways it is

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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