Adults do less exercise these days. Some people think that showing sports events on the television such as the Olympics and international tournaments is the best way to encourage adults to do exercise. Others believe there are more effective ways to do so. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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this
context, Some people believe that
sports
such
as
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Olympics
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olympics
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and International tournaments
in
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television
is
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more effective for
adults
to get involved in doing
exercise
. While others think that there are more ways to do
exercise
.
However
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this
essay discusses both these
perspective
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before reaching
reasoned
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conclusion. On the one hand, the former
group
argue that the
adults
will get more inspired while watching
sports
on television and will decide to go for
exercise
. They so because if they are watching their
intersted
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interested
sports
, they will become more motivational to do
exercise
.They put forward these
sports
as their
first
option. If someone watched
badminton
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match on TV , they will
be get
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interested in playing that for a while.So for the football too.
Therefore
the
supporters
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pf
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of
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this
group
uphold the view that
This
is the best way to enhance
adults
to do
exercise
. The latter
group
on the other hand
opt that There are more effective ways to develop
exercise
habit
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habits
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in
adults
, which make a systematic
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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.
For example
, they could join
in
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several clubs or association which involves gym, yoga, laughing clubs, jogging , walking etc.
This
will help the
adults
to do
execise
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exercise
in a sociable and enjoyable atmosphere.
As a result
, they will be more
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interested
intersted
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interested
in meeting friends and doing activities. Having analysed both the views and points , I tend to stand with the latter
group
. I believe that a systematic ,
time managing
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exercise
will help
adults
to lead a happy and balanced life.
Hence
it is hoped that
every one
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should maintain a healthy
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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by their own means, whatever the ways it is
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and make
andmake
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and make
their future more
colorful
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.
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