Some people use social media to keep in touch with other people and news event. Do you think the advantages of this technology outweigh the disadvantages?

In recent days, social media has become one of the important
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to get
news
at glance and remain connected with friends and peers. Various Pros and cons are associated with it.
However
, I believe that there are more advantages
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disadvantages
disadvanatges
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disadvantages
. In
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essay
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both sides will be discussed before making a final stance. To commence with,
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positive
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aligned with
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the use
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of e-commerce.
Firstly
, it reduces physical distance among individuals. Nowadays pupil
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their towns for higher education or to get jobs so
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them to keep in touch with them.
Secondly
,
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a lot
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a lot
of promotional pages are created on these websites. People are able to procure different materials by contacting these advertisers.
Thirdly
,
news
channels
also
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electronic media to relay daily
news
.
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use
it as an opportunity to keep themselves updated with various events.
For example
, Facebook is one the
platfrom
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platform
where one can find old friends and subordinates.
Furthermore
, they are even able to find products for themselves and apart from it, they are constantly getting knowledge about various activities going around the world.
In contrast
, there are
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negative aspects as well.
Hackers
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community
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use
the personal information provided by a profile holder to perform
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unethical actions. Not only
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create a
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dummy
profile by
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name but
also
ask for money from some friends. Another, con linked with electronic media is
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authenticity
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of data.
Neferious
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Nefarious
elements spread fake
news
to
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disturb
harmony and peace .
For instance
, on social
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messengers
photoshoped
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photoshopped
images are shared which hurts
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of the targeted person and it creates
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rucks
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in the society. To conclude with, it can be
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understand
that
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in spite
of few disadvantages, there
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increased number of advantages which outshines the former.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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