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Do the dangers derived from the use of chemicals in food production and preservation outweighs the advantages?

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It is said that technology attributes to developments in several industries including the
food
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 industry. There is no shortage of debate on whether chemical
ingredients
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 do more good than harm or not. The argument that
chemicals
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 which are used in products eaten by humans cause more health damage than the advantages is both agreed upon and disagreed with by many. The two sides of the statement will be analysed and discussed thoroughly in the following essay, before drawing a reasoned conclusion. It is a common belief that chemical
additives
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 allow us to keep foods longer. Take my case
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. I usually buy groceries once a week since I'm too busy to go to a grocery store every day.
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, I can consume some products,
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 as instant noodles, 5 days after I bought them
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 because
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 prevent them from spoiling. Owing to the
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, I don't waste
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,
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 chemical
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 are beneficial for both me and the environment.
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, we can make the best use of the limited resources if
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 products contain artificial nutrition.
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, it is obvious that chemical substances cause damage to people's health.
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, the research done by Cambridge University revealed that 60% of those who consumed more than 100g of chemical
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 per month became obese in the United Kingdom.
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, it was proved that one chemical substance which is commonly used by fast-
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 chains causes cancer a long time after it is consumed. Those problems are irrecoverable, and
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 a number of people all over the world suffer from some kind of physical condition issue which is attributed to
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additives
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. In conclusion, chemical
ingredients
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 are always unhealthy and they cause substantial health problems globally. To summarize,
chemicals
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 have advantages and disadvantages, both of which are supported by compelling facts.
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, after a thorough analysis of
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 argument, it is clear that
chemicals
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 contained in
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 are harmful to human beings. It is
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 predicted that the adverse effects of
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 in
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 will be always greater than the positive effects, and because of
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, I maintain that the
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 industry has to replace them with healthy
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 and that people should be aware of possible issues.
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